This is very good I like how you described what happens in the flood, and how the next slides are very creative by changing the backgrounds and words colours.
My name is Whetuarangi and this is what I wrote to you. I think that the words you wrote on the first slide were amazing and your story was nice to read but some of your words were not spelt right and your WALT was not there but everything else was great Jono. but one question where are those images from? hhhhh definitely not from the North Island
Hi Jono I like that you have used lots of interesting words but next time you just need to use full stops in some places and fix up weather.When you use that it will be perfect.
Hi Jonathan my name is Sonny, I got to tautoro school and I am a yr 6 I love how you made your introduction and how you made it clear about what school you go to,what your name is and how old you are.
Hello Jonothan my name is Ani, I like that started your story by introducing yourself. I really like the pictures you put in your story. I think you should fix some sentences. I like the part where you told the readers what you were doing while it was flooding. Don't forget the W.A.L.T next time. All tho I like your story!
Hi Jonothan my name is huhana-Jean,I like the way u wrote ur introduction of ur self but you really need to work on ur editing and ur sentences.I like ur first background but is it in the north island and in nz as well don't forget ur W.A.L.T in ur story next time you write another story bout tha flooding on thursday and friday for the hole day.All tho I liked ur story👌
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ReplyDeletethat was a great story jono I liked how you described what the rain was like.
ReplyDeleteI like how you started your story by describing floods in different words. You might want to check your words after a full stop.
ReplyDeleteThis is very good I like how you described what happens in the flood, and how the next slides are very creative by changing the backgrounds and words colours.
ReplyDeleteI like the photos that you used on your slideshow and for your descriptive words. ka pai
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ReplyDeleteKia Ora Jonathan I am Ariaana. I like when you said you were playing in the water. You just need to work a bit on your spelling.
ReplyDeleteMy name is Whetuarangi and this is what I wrote to you.
ReplyDeleteI think that the words you wrote on the first slide were amazing and your story was nice to read but some of your words were not spelt right and your WALT was not there but everything else was great Jono. but one question where are those images from? hhhhh definitely not from the North Island
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ReplyDeletehi jonathan i like the part where you write about dirt bikeing and dont forget to put your WALT in next time
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ReplyDeleteHi Jono I like that you have used lots of interesting words but next time you just need to use full stops in some places and fix up weather.When you use that it will be perfect.
ReplyDeleteHi Jonathan my name is Sonny, I got to tautoro school and I am a yr 6 I love how you made your introduction and how you made it clear about what school you go to,what your name is and how old you are.
ReplyDeleteHi jono I really liked reading your story.I like how you explained what you did.There was a few mistakes.
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ReplyDeleteYou have a good story but you need to edit your story properly.
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ReplyDeleteHello Jonothan my name is Ani, I like that started your story by introducing yourself. I really like the pictures you put in your story. I think you should fix some sentences. I like the part where you told the readers what you were doing while it was flooding. Don't forget the W.A.L.T next time. All tho I like your story!
ReplyDeleteHi Jonothan my name is huhana-Jean,I like the way u wrote ur introduction of ur self but you really need to work on ur editing and ur sentences.I like ur first background but is it in the north island and in nz as well don't forget ur W.A.L.T in ur story next time you write another story bout tha flooding on thursday and friday for the hole day.All tho I liked ur story👌
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